pjtalty wrote,
This love poem generates an appropriate degree of passion which will be picked up by
sensitive readers and shared. The reason is that you have effectively used the free verse form by writing in a pattern that
is not governed by the rules of metrical rhythm. I am impressed by the way you create rhythm that varies from line to line
with the thought and feeling of the moment.
During my reading of the piece I also became aware of a musical effect
(very important in romantic poetry) as my ear was attracted by repeated rhythmic groupings (cadences?) . This factor is important
because it is crucial in differentiating free verse from prose.
I have awarded a well-deserved five stars.
Well
done.
Regards,
Patrick.
EmileJP wrote,
The words took stage and treated the reader to a glimpse of your imagination as your
magic pen danced and brought forth such lucid thoughts. The words are sweet, full of life and bravado. Wonderful imagery and
depth to this piece. Your thoughts come alive and breathe within your words.
Tallteller wrote,
Whoever he is he is one lucky guy. If anyone had ever written poetry like that to
me I would have sprouted wings and flown on the breath of heaven and dipped my feathered tips into the golden surface of eternity,
singing the song of souls everlasting.
charmane wrote,
My pulse has accelerated and my heart is entwined, and caught up in the moment. This
is so... great! An excellent poem for lovers and etc. The picture is suggestive of a wild romance that eludes time. It is
just you and your lover. I can visualize the haughtiness and hunger that lures one to a love so defined. Best of luck with
this poem. You are so... talented.
Julian Snow wrote,
I really liked this, very sensual and erotic! Although it is very enjoyable, I was
wondering if maybe it can explore the relationship a little deeper. It seems like that they use words like eternity and perfect
very lightly. Overall, I found it very enjoyable
mspotter27 wrote,
this is very frank, simple,
a statement of distanced love,
completely
understood here
and living...
thanks for a new take on the "old" for me,
mspotter
